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    dots Submission Name: A broken Promisedots

    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       something I just thought of....The grammer sucks I will come back and fix it later when I thinking clearly

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    dotsA broken Promisedots

    The key you once held in your hand ever so close, now lays on the ground before my fee,t Its been laying there since you gave it back to me, I am not going to pick it back up, I don't want to see the key crumble in my hand, I know it will never be the same key again just as my heart will never be the same, I lie in bed thinking of you every single night, those words you once said to me while looking me in my eyes still haunt me to this day, All I wanted was for you to mean them and still be the everything I thought you were, How do I move on when I cant believe love is ever real? How can you go through your day like nothing ever happened? How can you see me walk by and not even get a tinge of regret? Knowing you destroyed my heart. For the longest time I was dead inside pushing everyone away because I thought I would never mean anything to anyone again, I know longer do that because I know who I am now, and it took you throwing the key back at me to wake up and relize I had no idea what those words meant, I never want to here those words again by anyone but the voice inside my head "I promise to love you until there is no more love" What an empty promise

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