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    dots Submission Name: Sands Of Timedots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 185/164/70
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 579
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsSands Of Timedots
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    Life's too long to live, but too short to die
    When everything i say take's a piece inside
    All the world's awake, but i have closed my eyes
    I wish it all away, but nothing's right

    Tears run down my cheek, as i look away
    This is all i have known, my guilt and my dismay
    I don't have the strength, i don't know what to say
    Here is where i stand, alone and afraid

    The sands of time run out, and i'm the one to lose
    I heard them talk about the heart-breaking news
    I don't know where to go, i don't know what to do
    Now that God took away what i had in you

    I sold you my soul, i gave you my life
    Who want's death, when living's half the price
    An ironic phrase, echoed in my mind
    Until it's all lost, in the sands of time




    Submitted on 2010-06-05 11:22:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel you could have went further with this it'd make it all the better other than that though I feel it was a good write over all I like the title and how you do not over use it

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      gave me goose bumps...sigh
    | Posted on 2010-06-08 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]


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