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Body of Lies-breakup with baby


Author: concrete_rose
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Body of Lies-breakup with baby



Trouble foreseen is greatly appreciated,
When the life of someone relies solely upon you,
And the love supposed to be forever no longer reciprocated,
Hardens the heart to take the harshness of this world anew.

To move forward swiftly as ships upon turbulent waters,
Escaping a similar fate of disaster from previous storms,
This queen of reluctant happier fates waivers,
Bound by tight agitation from the horrible suitors.

Oh but amongst the judgments and the strains,
A new life has begun to take its shape and place,
It knows nothing of the pains;
Only wanting now to see its sweet face.

It must live a normal life,
It must not be harmed and alarmed,
At such an early age to learn the hard strife,
Having to fight for itself so early, I was warned.

06/04/2010
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