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    dots Submission Name: This Timedots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Uncertainty fills my mind,
    Other telling me what they think
    Adding to all unwanted opinionsí in my head.
    Forming with the doubts I already have.

    Is this for real?
    Or just another game Iíll lose.
    Please donít break my heart,
    I just need you please baby
    Donít prove me wrong.

    Letís show them all that we can be.
    This time itís different I swear.
    Forget the stars, I wanna touch the moon.
    With you Iím sure itís possible.
    Please baby donít make a fool out of me.

    Letís pretend there is just you and me.
    No one to stand in our way,
    No one to say this is wrong.
    Run free this is our time.
    Letís show all that we are.

    Please baby lets go back,
    To the time before,
    Before all of it just fell apart.
    I promise not to let go,
    I promise not to run. Please baby.

    Letís remove all doubt, I know
    What I want all you have to do is say yes.
    Just take it all it was yours from the start.
    Without you my heart has nothing
    Please baby Iím right here,
    Letís take this world by storm.




    Submitted on 2010-06-06 14:52:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      P.S. maybe you should rename it... 'please baby, this time' because please baby is your highest repetition phrase...
    | Posted on 2010-06-06 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      --Some ideas and some critiques...

    Uncertainty fills my mind,
    Other(s) telling me what they think
    Adding to all unwanted opinionsí in my head.
    Forming with the doubts I already have.

    --Make it more definate...

    "Letís remove all doubt, I know
    What I want all you have to do is say yes.
    Just take it all it was yours from the start.
    Without you my heart has nothing
    Please baby Iím right here,
    Letís take this world by storm."

    --Let's remove all doubt, just say yes
    I am yours, I have been from the start
    Without you my heart has nothing,
    Please baby, I'm right here...
    Let's take the world by storm
    | Posted on 2010-06-06 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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