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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLoadeddots
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    Things in the bag I got from your house after everything:
    One mordant red IOU sex booklet, never used
    A tub of I canít believe itís not butter!
    that you got me because I didnít really like yours, much.

    Black shiny heels and a pair of shoes I never wore.

    Ponytail bands, probably strewn across your floor.

    A black knit hat, dotted with crumbs from your couch:
    leftover constellations.
    One contact lens case, one flip flop, an earring,
    all yearning.

    And at the bottom,
    as if by accident, as if on purpose
    your grocery receipt from the night I left
    LG EGGS 0.99
    MF BREAD 4.19
    SWB BAGEL 2.50
    etcetera,
    all the things
    I used to bring you
    just because
    I could.




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