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    dots Submission Name: The Realtordots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Realtordots
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    We know sprawling lake views
    are your preference,
    bridges arching over a still sheet of cerulean,
    gazing out of wall-sized sixth floor windows
    at the high beams of the cars driving across
    like a bright string of Christmas lights,

    but we think youll find this
    acceptable, this look out across
    the grainy brown of suburban rooftops,
    out towards the sky where trees used to tower
    until they were cut down
    to make room for hundreds more rooftops.

    We know waking in the morning
    to tousled hair and soft low breaths
    is your preference,
    after falling asleep to piano
    ballads or the sound of a
    typewriter click-clacking frantically
    from across the room,

    but we think youll find this
    acceptable, this waking to
    screams of children and the low growl
    of various lawn mowers,
    a suburban symphony in its first movement,
    slowly crescendoing
    as emptiness begins
    clanging on its
    great guttural timpani.




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      How has no one commented on this, your writting efficiency is amazing, good vocabulary, and great visualizations even the title of the piece goes seamless.... BRAVO
    | Posted on 2010-06-10 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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