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    dots Submission Name: Anonymous - Excerpt (1)dots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Prose/Dark
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    dotsAnonymous - Excerpt (1)dots
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    These journals span a lifetime of thoughts and yet they reveal nothing in their pages. Extended rambling sentences, half finished thoughts scratched here in a frenzy I cannot contain. I am, though I can never be, and so I strive to become. Something dark pulls from beneath the surface. Something unmasked, yet it remains hidden even from my own eyes. A word skipped as a rock may dance across a river to the safe haven of anonymity. Merge the course, find a way, survive the minefield of being. Reluctance can show the way if you listen close enough. All that I have never been is what will be left of me. To be picked through and sorted, it will remain a mystery. For if I revealed the humbled child, you would break her spirit and eat her soul.




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      wow I really like this although felt u could keep going with it also to me the end didnt seem to fit well nevertheless i enjoyed this rant a great deal

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-06-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, the beginning sounded something like Id say describing one of my venting composition books. "reluctance can show the way if you listen close enough"
    great Line. But I guess you'd have to show no hesitation to get to where it takes you...
    | Posted on 2010-06-15 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]
      the first part sounds like the begging page of a diary (IMO). but the last part being scared to be vunerable? be vunerable just keep a tough shell. i liked the skipping rock metaphor it worked really nice

    L.o ~.^
    | Posted on 2010-06-10 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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