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    dots Submission Name: Asleepdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAsleepdots
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    The clouds have come

    The rain is falling

    And you're still dreaming

    The earth is shaking
    I'm breaking

    And you're still dreaming

    I left this world to hide
    in my mind

    You're asleep

    Do I have to yell to wake you?

    I only find quiet in sadness

    The rain is falling

    Time is passing

    I'm looking at you through glass...

    I'm sitting all alone

    The earth is shaking
    I'm breaking

    And you're still asleep.




    Submitted on 2010-06-09 23:55:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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