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    dots Submission Name: What happen?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 606
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    Bytes: 1329



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       I hate her! as much love has I have witin me I have equal amout of hate for My Mother


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    dotsWhat happen?dots
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    I cried last night
    I longed for your presence
    I longed to have you near

    yet I cannot have you near
    for my actions have stopped this from ever happening...

    I did what you asked MOM
    I told the police
    I explaind how he touched me

    I did what you asked...Mom?

    Where did I go wrong...?
    Why won't you speak to me?

    Ashamed you are I see,
    ..Disgusted you are indeed,
    No No not by me I understand fully!!

    A glimpse of me is a simple yet a difficult reminder to yourself,
    of all your faults,

    all your failures

    Not only do you allow me to suffer threw years of sexual abuse growing up!
    Now you shun me from you life because you allowed what happened & NOW feel guilty for these actions??

    WELL MOTHER I hope the Lord above has pity on your soul I truely do
    Otherwise you will not make it very far when your time COMES




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      I really like the careful use of bold font and italics to emphasize certain words.

    A couple small typos: it should be "explained" (line 8), then in the second to last stanza you wrote "threw" instead of "through", and the last stanza should say "truly". No big deal. :)

    Very powerful and striking message. I am sorry that you have had such a difficult situation to deal with in your past. I hope that things are better for you now.

    | Posted on 2010-06-13 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      Keep writing and get all your emotions out. Thats the only way I survived. Oh and music helps a lot to. Good Luck. It's not easy being surrounded by stupid idiots who stay in denial. Stay strong!
    | Posted on 2010-06-10 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]
      Heavy stuff, keep in mind it may not feel like it now, but you will be steering your own life in the direction you want, it might feel as if someone else is driving but it will be your path soon
    | Posted on 2010-06-10 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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