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    dots Submission Name: Honey Moon Stagedots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHoney Moon Stagedots
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    It's funny how you think your in love
    Then you bounce out of it so quickly
    Realizing it wasn't love at all
    Maybe you really just wanted the excuse to have sex and not seem like a whore
    Maybe you just wanted to feel loved
    I don't know what it is but once the honeymoon stage is over...it's definitely over
    The love you thought you had turned to hate
    Feelings and memories turned to dust
    Back at square one is where you stand
    Feeling bad that you broke up
    Definitely glad that it's now over
    Funny how life strikes you I guess
    I'm just glad I passed my honeymoon stage
    And I am still just as in love with you as before
    Phew!! That was a close one




    Submitted on 2010-06-10 15:09:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was pretty good, I was reading it thinking "aint that the truth" then the last two lines kinda jerk ya in the other direction. Because I was relating to the whole "wanted to have sex and not feel like a whore" line you had, so you kind of get this idea that oh aint love grand, but really love doesnt even begin until after the honeymoon cause before you get married, well, in my opinion, It's just all about makin' WHOOPIE!
    | Posted on 2010-06-16 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]
      What a wonderful idea to write a poem about! I know so many people like this that fall in love with nothing but sunny skies and then fall out of love the second the storm appears. It is bizarre, but extremely common. I think we are all just looking for that special someone and desperately just want to believe we have found them.

    I like the little twist at the end and how you reflect on yourself and your own experiences.

    I have also made it out of the honeymoon stage in my current relationship... and it is exciting now to see if this is it.

    Anyways, thanks for sharing. I enjoyed it and it has given me something to really think about in regards to my own life.
    | Posted on 2010-06-13 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      one of my best friends is like this, i like her more than she knows, but i digress and continue to be her friend, not stepping over that boundary, she falls in "love" so quick when that "honeymoon stage" falls down she comes to me to rant and cry. all and all lifes to short to get hung up on details besides the fact, do what you want to do, i hate watching her hurt herself even more so as i am here to be a safe place but ill wait, and help her till shes ready. keep your head up
    | Posted on 2010-06-10 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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