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    dots Submission Name: Loveís Commitment dots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 691
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 926



    Description:
       This was written when I was asked to present a writing that would depict what love actually meant to me or for me if i had some one that i did love. This is what i under stand of it, not saying that this is how itís suppose to be.


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    dotsLoveís Commitment dots
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    Love, from it can only be joy

    If we can treat it properly

    A power that must be seen delicately

    Like a gem held with great sensitivity



    And whatever may try to tear us apart

    Love can pull us together and makes us stronger

    Helping us to go passed that impossible measure

    She would only for me and I only for her



    Love will move me to comfort her

    Weighing within her sea of tears

    Holding her while she conquers her fears

    Staying by her side whether the sky is clouded or clear



    With loveís power held deep within

    Iíd do anything proving what she means to me

    Into her arms is the feel of serenity

    With this love, I want to stay with her for eternity




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      I think this is so compelling because it's heartfelt. It has a sense of grounded sentiment that can not be rooted in obscure descriptions of sensory overload adjectives. It's simple, direct, deep and relatable. The way the poem rolls off the tongue is beautiful as well. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2017-11-04 00:00:00 | by Chelebel | [ Reply to This ]
      What l like about this poem are the nice sentiments and the rhyming is consistent. It kinda melts right into after a few reads. it is a very simple poem an does have a very general point of view like you said it showed what you understand of love. Some more specifics would make it more interesting like what specifically you like about her. The way she slides a piece of her hair back when it gets loose and falls into her face. Or what she may say that lifts your spirits somethings like that
    | Posted on 2010-06-11 00:00:00 | by thepulse | [ Reply to This ]


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