This poem shows how selfish a person can be when they give up. they forget the people around them thinking only of themselves. I like how you portrayed it in the structure of the lines. the way you wrote it gave it an interesting tempo. the breaks into stanzas made you stop and think about the thought of each stanza as it tells a story up until the end. one line confused me though in stanza 7 and the last line which said "though her body was no longer her's" in what way was it not hers- was she relinquishing it to the ocean to cause her death? over all it was good.
Submission Name: Simply a Burden
