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    dots Submission Name: Can you try to see?dots
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    Author: therottenapple
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 2/5/21
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angst
    Total Views: 486
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    Description:
       After listening to Limp Bizkit's Don't Go Wandering Off I started thinking like the lyrics in the song and tried to do me own spin on it.


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    dotsCan you try to see?dots
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    Would you think any less of me
    If you knew what I wanted to be
    What I was trying to see
    But failing miserably
    Would you give me any sympathy
    If you knew me
    If you felt me
    If you felt that nothing
    That I canít run away from

    Would you try to save me
    From the things only I can see
    From what youíve read, heard
    But never felt
    The cage that I force myself in and light it up

    Can you see the darker side in me
    The shroud of misery
    The loving that is absentee
    And the humility
    Of the face I put on
    The smiles that I fake
    The goodness is gone
    Because I canít stop this hate

    Youíre as fucking blind as me

    Would you try to save me
    From the things only I can see
    From what youíve read, heard
    But never felt
    The cage that I force myself in and light it up
    Oh God or someone please help me
    The temptation is growing
    And I can barely
    Resist

    You canít see
    Fucking Blind as me
    You wonít see
    You donít know what you want to see
    Just not me




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