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    dots Submission Name: Solitudedots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 530
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 723



    Description:
       Description:
    Ten reasons of death

    1. Old age
    2. Wrath
    3. solitude
    4. Emptiness
    5. Despair
    6. Destruction
    7. Intoxication
    8. Insanity
    9. Greed
    10. Sacrifice

    Third - solitude: Alone - very easy to describe as this is how I have lived.


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    dotsSolitudedots
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    Smile like a joker in front of all,
    I smile with a tear in my eyes before I cry.
    Pathetic little me walking on the ground,
    As I laugh at myself with a smile, with a frown.

    Help, and I am with myself with no one around,
    but people...they just walked pass by.
    I am alive I scream at all,
    Does someone listen to me,
    No...they don't,
    They see me with a blind fold, I see them...I see.

    Hold me in your arms, give me life I ask,
    Yes I am here ...I hear myself
    It's quiet now ...I say to myself,
    Shall I live ...I ask myself.

    silence......is all that I hear for now...




    Submitted on 2010-06-12 10:25:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a nice poem about I believe the frustration of being alone. We all feel this at a time in our lives. When no one seems to understand and dig in and help. I think it is nicely written. I read it a few times and gather that the narrator is being ignored which spell out how cold heart people an be. Nicely communicated.
    | Posted on 2010-06-12 00:00:00 | by thepulse | [ Reply to This ]


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