Spirling out of control I am
These walls I built as protection
Are in reality the walls of my Prision I have resided within for too long
Feeling as if...
These no where to turn to
No one to run to
Empty inside, I am
yet also full of hate, anger, and guilt
Can't seem to get a grip on things
Either too far to grasp or my grip simply isn't enough to hold
Loosing the will to understand the things I've always longed to know
To finding the answers to my many unanswered questions
A prisoner to these wall I am!
I acknowledge this
The memories they hold
I try to live this life I've been given
Yet I cannot
For these walls.. They, haunt me
I can relate to this poem. It reminds me of living in TN, miles from everything. I moved there for the seclusion, then once I had it I lost everything else; my job, my girlfriend, my family and sanity. It's all about the decisions in life that had led us to the present, or the walls we must put up in our own self-righteous concept of how to be. A few spelling errors but it didn't stop me from really enjoying this one. You got yourself a fan!
Quite a few spelling errors... but nothing a quick edit can't fix:
(line 1) "spiraling"
(line 3) "prison"
(line 6) "There is" instead of "These"? I'm not sure what you meant in that particular line.
(line 12) "losing"
(line 14) "walls"
Now, with that out of the way... this poem is very striking. I am going to assume it is about you since you used the first person in your description.
I'd be interested to know more about the prison and its walls. It seems to be left pretty vague as to what the real issues are. Of course, that could be your intention... to leave it open to interpretation. It definitely leaves me with a curious feeling to know more of the story.
Get out of there! Life is precious. Loving is giving. Positive thoughts bestow positive energy, energy to pull down those walls. People give joy especially the right ones in their absence. Positive thoughts motivate. Nice piece
Hope u really aint within them horrid walls. Error these walls not there wall.