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Author: Mithrandir
ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
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Words: 192
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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it is what it is


The silence between us
is but a testament
only the naive believe
love comes from the heart

No longer will my voice
be as thunder in your ears
these are the final thoughts
I give to you

Death comes in many forms
and as often as the setting sun
there shall be no mourning
no empty platitudes
not this time

Because emotion
is our inconvenient truth
Chemical reactions from
conscious and subconscious thought

It's criminal
the void that spans between
but from the weight of guilt
neither is spared

Maybe I have nothing left to offer
and you may no longer care
Yet blood still flows
the organic remains intact

An angry man has passed beyond the veil

Now a hopeful man stands
hand outstretched
heart unbroken

but worry not
many years remain
till he see's his sunset

though fists may burn with hatred
Chests may constrict with fear
and skulls pound from anger
these things are born of the body

Love is ethereal
it comes from the soul
and it shall always remain

I just thought you should know

Submitted on 2010-06-12 18:39:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  again...such bare, ferocious truths...but that ring of hope as this nears its end...

as we want to have hope of doing some good before we reach our end..

that we make some mark..that we make peace with others and more importantly ourselves.

| Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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