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    dots Submission Name: A lonely Medots
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    Author: Areeba
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       The poem outlines what it feels like to be broken from inside. I cant say more......Its my very first work.


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    dotsA lonely Medots
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    I see around and found,
    A Hole too deep.....A sorrow too sound....,
    A heart thats full Of Many fears,
    They don't fill the eyes,
    No...... they're silent tears,

    I see around and found,
    You...in a far, and peaceful place,
    A place full of Beauty,
    A place full of Ease,
    A place i did love to trade,
    No matter what the price,
    A place where death is more sweet than life,

    I see around and found,
    A heart thats dying,
    With each single sound,
    A heart that was meant For binding "WE"
    A heart thats just now.......A lonely ME.....




    Submitted on 2010-06-12 20:10:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very touching poem. Deep like abyss. Good write. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2010-06-13 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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