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    dots Submission Name: Swapped 2 relevance!dots
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    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Religious
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    dotsSwapped 2 relevance!dots
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    U 'av put singin in me beatin heart
    Dancing 2 me two left feet
    Me dampin voice thou gav sound
    Lift me off d sinkin ground
    2u I giv up all me quakin praise,
    None do I withhold.
    Cos me steps thou maketh bold,
    Me very name thou inscribed in Gold,
    Thou swapped me story of old!




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      I enjoyed this spiritual praise of thankfulness. Thanks for sharing! It makes me want to count my own blessings in life.
    | Posted on 2011-05-23 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Usually poems with messed up spelling or chatspeak get on my nerves. However, I think with this poem you create a very interesting dialect with the way you spell words (not sure if that was your intention or not). It makes the work have a very rhythmic quality that makes me think of a drum beat... I think that just comes from the imagery in the first two lines.

    Very happy and uplifting poem that is succinct and to the point. I see you have it under the "religious" category which helps me understand the poem more. If I hadn't seen the category... I think I might of possibly seen this as more of a love/relationship poem with my first reading. However, I think after more readings I would have picked up on the obvious religious aspect since you used words such as, "praise" and "lift"... which have religious connotations.

    Anyways, I enjoyed it. Thanks!
    | Posted on 2010-06-13 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]


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