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Swapped 2 relevance!

Author: Temidayo
ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
Elite Ratio:    8 - 161 /40 /20
Words: 57
Class/Type: Misc /Religious
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Life just got better!

Swapped 2 relevance!

U 'av put singin in me beatin heart
Dancing 2 me two left feet
Me dampin voice thou gav sound
Lift me off d sinkin ground
2u I giv up all me quakin praise,
None do I withhold.
Cos me steps thou maketh bold,
Me very name thou inscribed in Gold,
Thou swapped me story of old!

Submitted on 2010-06-13 07:36:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I enjoyed this spiritual praise of thankfulness. Thanks for sharing! It makes me want to count my own blessings in life.
| Posted on 2011-05-23 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Usually poems with messed up spelling or chatspeak get on my nerves. However, I think with this poem you create a very interesting dialect with the way you spell words (not sure if that was your intention or not). It makes the work have a very rhythmic quality that makes me think of a drum beat... I think that just comes from the imagery in the first two lines.

Very happy and uplifting poem that is succinct and to the point. I see you have it under the "religious" category which helps me understand the poem more. If I hadn't seen the category... I think I might of possibly seen this as more of a love/relationship poem with my first reading. However, I think after more readings I would have picked up on the obvious religious aspect since you used words such as, "praise" and "lift"... which have religious connotations.

Anyways, I enjoyed it. Thanks!
| Posted on 2010-06-13 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]

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