U 'av put singin in me beatin heart
Dancing 2 me two left feet
Me dampin voice thou gav sound
Lift me off d sinkin ground
2u I giv up all me quakin praise,
None do I withhold.
Cos me steps thou maketh bold,
Me very name thou inscribed in Gold,
Thou swapped me story of old!
Usually poems with messed up spelling or chatspeak get on my nerves. However, I think with this poem you create a very interesting dialect with the way you spell words (not sure if that was your intention or not). It makes the work have a very rhythmic quality that makes me think of a drum beat... I think that just comes from the imagery in the first two lines.
Very happy and uplifting poem that is succinct and to the point. I see you have it under the "religious" category which helps me understand the poem more. If I hadn't seen the category... I think I might of possibly seen this as more of a love/relationship poem with my first reading. However, I think after more readings I would have picked up on the obvious religious aspect since you used words such as, "praise" and "lift"... which have religious connotations.