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    dots Submission Name: It Happened With a Bulletdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 487
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    Description:
       Part of a dream


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    dotsIt Happened With a Bulletdots
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    Shh he said to me

    his whispering voice still echoes in my mind

    It'll be alright
    He promised me

    You'll smile again
    He lied to me

    I look on with closed eyes

    His face is all I see

    Wake up!
    He begged me

    How I broke from that
    look upon his face

    I walk in this dream
    flower filled
    endless sea

    I can see him in front row

    His tears kill me
    The irony

    Gentle hands hold
    onto the thorn rose

    I take his hand
    though he cannot feel me

    When he sleeps
    he speaks

    Shhh
    He said to me

    I follow him
    The one I love

    He cries
    "It'll be alright!"
    He promises me

    His words still echo in my mind
    I love you
    He tells me

    At this place
    Where I shall rest
    In peace
    Waiting for him




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