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    dots Submission Name: I Want Youdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI Want Youdots
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    These words are begging my lips
    speak
    Please
    Don't let him go

    I am afraid to cry
    I am afraid to loose this

    The little bit of protection I feel with you near

    The ease and energy of standing close to you

    You're not like the others
    I don't know how to cope

    With this feeling

    I can't stop talking
    People say I've gone crazy

    These words are begging my lips
    Tell him

    They find impatience with my mouth
    and use my eyes

    I'm stilled by your gaze

    Should I be afraid?

    You seem so safe

    These words are begging my lips

    I want you




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    ||| Comments |||
      it is very nice i think S>
    | Posted on 2010-06-15 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]
      A marvelous and potent description of a particular that many of us have felt--often more than once--in our lives.... a fine, fine, poem!!
    | Posted on 2010-06-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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