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    dots Submission Name: Mermaids Dream of Motorised Boats ( slight rewritedots

    Author: col13x
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    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsMermaids Dream of Motorised Boats ( slight rewritedots

    Steal grey only for the sky
    Where sea and cloud can burn this heart
    And berate upon the tears of love
    A thousand waves to sink beneath
    And dream of quiet silent death

    Let them count the heartbeats
    Roll their endless blood interned on beaches
    Let them weep for stranded starfish
    Who cannot reach past the moon
    When she’s so full, so full of tricks

    Yes, the luck of fishermen is wasted in bait
    As they hope for freedom in bobbing floats
    And mermaids dream of motorised boats
    The tiny shells of clams become mobile phones
    And if I hold one to my ear
    Will I hear your voice

    You sound like the ocean
    But is it me
    Begging for whispers from the sea
    Watching the crests tip their white
    The veils of bridal gowns
    Rolling away endlessly

    Is the cliff a mighty fortress
    Or are these rocks a precipice
    Where should I throw this wish or kiss
    The steal grey sky, is all there is

    So to my oars as they seem so hexed
    To row in circles without a rest
    Somewhere below I know she lives
    Somewhere between halfway there to drown me
    And in the hopes of fisherman floats
    Beyond the moon so full of tricks
    But mermaids only dream of motorised boats

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