Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: It doesn't killdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 439
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 712



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIt doesn't killdots
    -------------------------------------------


    No matter the pain
    It is easy to say that I
    Cannot die just because
    Love wanted to be unfair.

    Hearts can be broken,
    Promises can be broken,
    Trust can be completely
    Destroyed, but does it kill?

    It hurts and tears are shed
    Blood is spilled and depression
    Then brews over the edge of
    Our young hearts, yet we live.

    You can try and understand
    But it is to complicated from
    Just a few words of an unknown
    Message, it doesn't destroy.

    Confusion becomes a famous
    Thing we all decide to blame
    Because we have no clue what
    Love is really suppose to be




    Submitted on 2010-06-16 19:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the last line the most. Overall, i think it is relatable to for anyone and has a positive message for anyone with a broken, aching heart.
    | Posted on 2010-06-17 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    185710

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Love written by saartha
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Relativity written by poetotoe

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry