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    dots Submission Name: Disgusteddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Fanfic/You left me
    Total Views: 524
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1527



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       I hate you mother with every fiber of my being


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    dotsDisgusteddots
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    You took this trust I placed within you,
    Slowly you picked away until nothing
    Absolutely nothing was left to give!

    Since the day I've been born,
    Since August 18th of 88' you have been in my life.
    You saw my transformation into a little tom boy to a young women.
    You saw my awkward periods
    As well as my happy moments.

    Being my Mother you've seen it all

    Therefore I sit here and ask you,
    Why did you put a pin prick hole into my heart and watch it bleed?
    Why did you take the trust so naturally given to a Mother by a daughter and slowly pick away at it?

    WHY the FuCk did you have to go and sqeez all the life out of my heart
    As you watch me dying in front of your eyes
    There is no emotion
    You do not care for me as you have pretended to

    You allowed him to touch me
    Allowed him to go into my room late at night
    You tolerated these actions by turning your head away,
    You acknowledged his behavior by suddenly having blinders on

    DOING such a thing... KILLED ME
    YOUR OWN FUCKING DAUGHTER

    HE... the MAN who abused me could never hurt me the way you have done so
    This man could go on abusing me until end of my LIFE
    although the amount of pain and disgust would not even COME close!

    To the pain you have ultimately caused me
    Or the extent of my disgust I have for you!




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      I think it is hard to really comment or critique a poem of this nature. I think all I can really say is that it is great you are writing about these issues and getting some of those feelings on to a page.

    It is very brave of you to share this with us. I am sorry that you have had such a hard past, but I hope that you are moving on and doing well now. I have found that some of the people with the worst experiences... have turned out to be some of the strongest and kindest people in the world.

    I am wishing you well with all your endeavors. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2010-06-19 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel every word in this poem / there are alot of people that have hurt me / and i know that i can just only forgive, and move on . this was a real emotional piece for me - thank you / stay strong.

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    | Posted on 2010-06-18 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you have a lot of pain. We're alike in that respect, and I'm really glad that you're working through yours by creating things like this. However it is you need to vent, keep doing it. I don't know you, but I love you. *hugs*
    | Posted on 2010-06-17 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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