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    dots Submission Name: Cancer Posing as a Geminidots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 775
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 979



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       not going to edit it, not going to censor it. it doesn't flow, is rambly and is entirely too honest for me to let anyone but strangers see. enjoy.


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    dotsCancer Posing as a Geminidots
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    Did he, didn't he, couldn't he, no he wouldn't.
    You you you and always the you that is current.
    How about an I, a me or an us?
    Perhaps you can't see it, and perhaps I can't trust.
    In and out and in again I find him
    always so eager to make amends.
    What about me this time, what about love?
    Or am I to late, did she steal it? Did she take it and run?
    Not her this time, me. I stole it with a smile.
    With a laugh, a kiss, a promise you're not vile.
    I crush you! Crusher of your heart as you did mine.
    I did it, I won. I smashed myself this time.
    Now eagerly I paint you the villain behind your back
    when truthfully it was I that broke our second chance.
    Solice in solitude now you've gone far away
    but still I'm holding on to our someday.
    Come back to me soon so we may try again
    you leaver of things, you fiend of all men.




    Submitted on 2010-06-17 23:33:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So, how do you really feel about this guy? Nice job here expressing your emotions.
    | Posted on 2010-06-19 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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