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    dots Submission Name: The Harpsichord Harbingerdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Harpsichord Harbingerdots
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    Crazy crack-addled pedestrians, like dancing skeletons on Walt Disney's broken black and white visions.
    Peering eyes turn over like stones, exposing the moisture beneath the sandy surfaces, shifting back as death begins to dine.
    A harbinger was said to come




    Submitted on 2010-06-18 19:17:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reads like a prelude and piqued my curiosity, for sure. Harbinger to what? Quite elliptical.

    I enjoyed it. Even these few lines possess the imagery and tone of desolation. Something like a graphic novel with a wry protagonist.

    Hm. 'fraid I don't have much more to say than that.

    -Emeya
    | Posted on 2010-06-18 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]


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