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    dots Submission Name: Wake updots
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    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotsWake updots
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    I'm falling far,
    I'm trying to breathe,
    Nothing seems true,
    Everything is a lie,
    even that smile,
    so sincere and innocent,
    is only a lie to make me think
    that you actually cared,
    know you say I'm changing who you are.
    Wake up from that dream you've been livin' in
    You have been nothing but a fake,
    screwing up the the person you could have been.
    If you like livin high then don't complain,
    that life isn't what you want it to be.
    We work to surive and it's a struggle.
    There is no way to escape,
    not even from high up,
    which only makes it worse.
    Quit lying to yourself,
    and wake the hell up!




    Submitted on 2010-06-18 20:51:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's called deception and it comes in many forms. I also
    have been caught in this trap of lies. Its gets hard to know
    what is real.

    Love of Christ,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2010-06-19 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it ! its like pushing and pulling some1 back into reality. it's like u can't run from yourself. very good indeed. I've been caught in this trap - like I'm in a dream; or that nothing in this world matters anymore. other t hen that i like it for the drive and effort it bleeds out .

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2010-06-18 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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