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    dots Submission Name: Home in Your Heartdots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 611
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 669



    Description:
       positive poetry, is not my strong point I tell you,


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    dotsHome in Your Heartdots
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    My voice could bounce,
    & echo off every wall
    Be drenched in red
    & sink into the depths of the floor
    While I spend my days watching a clock
    Thatís never told the time
    & a phone, that never returns my call
    But I wouldnít have a care in the world
    Cause itís never lonely, in your heart at all.

    My life could revolve and never rest-
    Remain seated and never stand,
    Seeing not an inch of sun,
    Or light when the darkness falls
    Cause thereís no reason to fight,
    Strike a match, or catch my breath,
    Cause itís never dark, in your heart at all.




    Submitted on 2010-06-19 02:45:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-06-23 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hope you pay the rent for your lodging! Funny
    Cool work sounds like a contented place to be,
    The easy structure does'nt allow for errors which is good.
    Your power of expression to me can be tuned more but the effect I get from this is visual,like I can see you locked in a dark place like a prisoner but if this place is a loved one's heart then it wont be dark and it would or you would like it there.
    Then the line saying -you have on reason to fight tells me of a strong influence you have on a loved one.nice work
    | Posted on 2010-06-23 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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