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Submission Name: Lines in the sand dots

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Author:	isis_lenore
Elite Ratio:	3.78 - 459/207/102
Words:	60

Class/Type:	Random Thoughts/Misc
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Lines in the sand dots

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Drawing lines in the sand
Time to stop hanging onto fences
and pick a side. Defend your line
Because it's bound to disappear.

Once upon a time is a fairy tale,
It's never going to happen
Happy endings? They don't exist

Because the story keeps moving
On and beyond the tidiness of
Happily Ever After- The End.

Submitted on 2010-06-19 12:39:04 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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A delightful ode to the fact that life is ever changing, and nothing remains the same. Draw a line, stand your ground, and then the Tide washes away the line!

Nice work!
| Posted on 2010-06-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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