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    dots Submission Name: Lines in the sanddots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsLines in the sanddots
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    Drawing lines in the sand
    Time to stop hanging onto fences
    and pick a side. Defend your line
    Because it's bound to disappear.

    Once upon a time is a fairy tale,
    It's never going to happen
    Happy endings? They don't exist

    Because the story keeps moving
    On and beyond the tidiness of
    Happily Ever After- The End.




    Submitted on 2010-06-19 12:39:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A delightful ode to the fact that life is ever changing, and nothing remains the same. Draw a line, stand your ground, and then the Tide washes away the line!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2010-06-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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