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    dots Submission Name: Rapportdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    And it is with the choice of footsteps
    You walk your path
    Battered and turned aside
    Even though those footprints are

    This life of falsehood claims
    Can never breach the voices
    But can drown
    The callings of your heart

    And to numb and dead silence
    Would bid its preference
    If you should so chose
    To bury yourself

    Yet I know from sleepless beds you stir
    And on petulant breath
    Hangs every question
    You have left unanswered

    And on every throne where is placed the answer
    Lays incomplete
    Blinded
    A balm of the make-believe

    More confusion for you to believe within
    More guilt in which to make
    The definitive statement
    Of yourself

    Though long ago you gave up the search
    Your heart has not
    It still knows and it still feels
    When it touches the truth

    For centuries
    The Spiritual, Esoteric and Mystery teachings
    Of many ancient cultures
    Have been trying to tell you about all the things you are feeling " NOW ".





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      wow yet another amazing post looking at older posts on you and I see you and I drawn to it... i say it so much but you have all it takes to be something special i feel yours and they all it home thanks again for posting I know I seem to repeat myself but I can't help it ...

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-07-15 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I like what you have here. Very insightful. It's feels incomplete though, like it stopped suddenly. Just me, but I think you might want to continue this and see where it leads; I believe there are depths hre you haven't mined yet.

    Peace,

    joey
    | Posted on 2010-06-19 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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