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    dots Submission Name: A true ectomydots
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    Author: SOS33
    ASL Info:    20/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 39/51/41
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 464
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    Bytes: 1729



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    dotsA true ectomydots
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    A series of text messages.
    an invitation sent many times before.
    ‘wanna come over?'

    This time is little different.

    A prior mistake changed the relationship,
    From ‘no’ to ‘you can have it’
    conversations following the mistake
    led her to believe it was once again a clear
    'No;’ she was mistaken.

    Conversation ensues:
    school, summer, nothing new.

    Followed by the usual 3 of 4 Fs.
    ‘let me. just once’
    The usual response is given.
    The usual act is not performed to fulfill.

    He has changed his mind.

    Already in the most native state,
    He takes what he believes to be his.
    Despite tears, pleads
    he forces a loss of what cannot De found.

    The brain takes, on the role of anesthesiologist.
    closed eyes attempt to prevent dehydration
    The roaring of the ears blocks out the metronomic creaks.
    the taste of cotton overshadows the remnants of ignored requests.
    The smell of anger streets replaces that of the sweat-drenched air.
    Paralysis from the neck down prevents the body from feeling the pain never-experienced before.

    A promise made at the commencement of womanhood --broken.

    A dream of a truly white dress -- crushed.

    A pride gained from repeatedly holding one's ground --gone.

    The –ectomy of her inner self:
    without the proper signatures
    missing the use of anesthetics
    and ending with a congratulatory high-five.




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