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    dots Submission Name: Haunteddots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
    Total Views: 395
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       Some idiot thought I should start watching True Blood. Definitely not a good idea. Eeekkk.


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    dotsHaunteddots
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    Shadows turn to monsters
    come to suck my blood
    Hinging on each breath
    Waiting for a flood
    They turn behind streetlamps
    and willow beneath rocks
    they inch a little closer

    and we duck

    Its dark and cold and damp down here
    They scream in rotten gasps
    It's stale and dusty
    We can barely breath down here
    Not living nor dead

    These monsters keep on haunting
    Until the bullet dabbles onward
    Our temples beckon it closer
    So we won't have to bother
    Air is suffocation
    And thoughts just falter

    Shadows turn to monsters
    We can barely foster

    Ten stone to each step
    Weighed down each toe
    Hands have lost all feeling
    A slightly purple glow

    I just wanted to forget
    But shadows turn to monsters

    Honey

    Until guilt strikes up again




    Submitted on 2010-06-21 05:42:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      They suggested you watch true blood??? With how scared of the dark that you get??? Somebody wasn't thinking right. If you have any nightmares, or just need someone to talk to, just whistle for me. You know how to whistle don't you? Just put your lips together and blow. ^_^


    Here for you when things go bump in the night,
    Phillip
    | Posted on 2010-06-28 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]


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