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    dots Submission Name: Ink-Colored Marrowdots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsInk-Colored Marrowdots
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    The Ink bleeds through her skin
    Staining the bone
    Each layer is too thin
    To protect what she wrote

    Verse and prose striving
    With syllable strength
    To build a bridge in emotions
    She could never express

    Silent words with no meaning
    Crawling in vain
    Secretly retreating
    To bones they have stained

    Left with ink-colored marrow
    Eyelids in place
    -The verse and the prose
    Still continually erased.




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       i just love this poem / it sways and keep a temple-beat of emotion.
    the poem is very true to itself ...bringing out a life of its own.
    its a very strong piece i have to say .... good write !

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    | Posted on 2010-06-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2010-06-23 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      So many things come alive,a display of animation, words failing to heal, yet exciting no pain. It got to the point I asked myself what is dying or bleeding so?
    The work tends to describe but still leaves me dazed. Is that the effect? Is the one of those artistic complex nothing. I have seen those in paintings but not in recent times in poetry. Well cant assume anything until You tell me whatever deep expression is jotted here! Hope to hear soon.
    | Posted on 2010-06-23 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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