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    dots Submission Name: maybe today.dots

    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsmaybe today.dots

    she cant understand
    as he raises his hand again
    how it all got so screwed up.
    their was no warning
    no sudden change
    he smiled all morning
    and even through the rage.
    and now her blood is pouring
    out into the world
    as her cries cannot be heard.
    shes silent
    cause shes scared
    and she knows that everyone cares
    just a little to much.
    he always says hes sorry
    he always begs&pleads
    she's a little to helpless
    so she goes where he leads.
    she knows that its wrong
    that this isnt how things should be
    but shes confused
    and shes alone in a sea of people.
    the feelings for him are awkward
    and shes afriad that karmas got her
    so she closes her eyes
    and prays
    maybe today he wont beat her.

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