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Author: MC white
ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71 /73 /45
Words: 69
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I stood out in the summer,
watched a storm blow in.
The clouds poured rushing forward,
The few seen stars grew dim.
The trees were filled with fireflies,
I watched one spiral down
like a star flung from the heavens,
or a snowflake, snowbank bound.
And as his kin all sparkled,
like I was Celebrity.
I took a step into the wind,
and wished you were with me.

Submitted on 2010-06-23 23:18:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  MC! what good my dude? ok this what it is..... this is a lil soft ur u dude. sorry. um.... my one suggestion tho is say "grow dim" gives a lil polysyllabic flare...idk.. nice to have u back dude i stop in here periodically... im starting to realize meyself ive gotta get back to my idk.... to speak, cuz i been doin alotta luv/miss u/ heartbroken stuff. its a issue we all attack so many times..... thats cuz its timeless... this would make a nice lil note for some one to "find" lol
| Posted on 2010-06-29 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]

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