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    dots Submission Name: Tonightdots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTonightdots
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    I stood out in the summer,
    watched a storm blow in.
    The clouds poured rushing forward,
    The few seen stars grew dim.
    The trees were filled with fireflies,
    I watched one spiral down
    like a star flung from the heavens,
    or a snowflake, snowbank bound.
    And as his kin all sparkled,
    like I was Celebrity.
    I took a step into the wind,
    and wished you were with me.




    Submitted on 2010-06-23 23:18:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      MC! what good my dude? ok this what it is..... this is a lil soft ur u dude. sorry. um.... my one suggestion tho is say "grow dim" gives a lil polysyllabic flare...idk.. nice to have u back dude i stop in here periodically... im starting to realize meyself ive gotta get back to my idk.... RANGE...so to speak, cuz i been doin alotta luv/miss u/ heartbroken stuff. its a issue we all attack so many times..... thats cuz its timeless... this would make a nice lil note for some one to "find" lol
    | Posted on 2010-06-29 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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