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    dots Submission Name: Farewell to my Emerald Eyed Taurusdots
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    Author: theDevilsPocket
    ASL Info:    23 Female
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 241/157/35
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 484
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 924



    Description:
       For my emerald eyed Taurus C.L Enough said.


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    dotsFarewell to my Emerald Eyed Taurusdots
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    I rid all traces of you today
    threw them into a fire and watched them burn,
    I asked ancient spirits to take my pain away
    although it made my stomach churn.

    I said that if you and I were not meant to be
    to finally cease my dreams,
    let me go, let me be free
    I'm tearing at the seams.

    I've said goodbye to your marble face
    I've said goodnight to your emerald eyes,
    pulled away from the warm embrace
    and memories of you and I.

    I've cried our past away
    and forced shut that stubborn door of our love tale,
    although my heart begs me to stay
    I need to escape this nostalgic jail.

    I need to let you go, this one last time
    please don't come looking for me again,
    I wanted to keep you forever mine
    but I can no longer hold on to way back when.




    Submitted on 2010-06-24 19:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a very daring and lovely piece. when read: it only reminds me of a lover... i once had in my life - but no more. the poem touched me and i love the way it wraps-up and comes to a closing. very good indeed....

    my fav line: I asked ancient spirits to take my pain away

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2010-06-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the way you rhyme sounds a little contrived, but some of the lines themselves are good. Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2010-06-24 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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