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Farewell to my Emerald Eyed Taurus


Author: theDevilsPocket
ASL Info:    23 Female
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Words: 155
Class/Type: Poetry /Nostalgia
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For my emerald eyed Taurus C.L Enough said.


Farewell to my Emerald Eyed Taurus



I rid all traces of you today
threw them into a fire and watched them burn,
I asked ancient spirits to take my pain away
although it made my stomach churn.

I said that if you and I were not meant to be
to finally cease my dreams,
let me go, let me be free
I'm tearing at the seams.

I've said goodbye to your marble face
I've said goodnight to your emerald eyes,
pulled away from the warm embrace
and memories of you and I.

I've cried our past away
and forced shut that stubborn door of our love tale,
although my heart begs me to stay
I need to escape this nostalgic jail.

I need to let you go, this one last time
please don't come looking for me again,
I wanted to keep you forever mine
but I can no longer hold on to way back when.




Submitted on 2010-06-24 19:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is a very daring and lovely piece. when read: it only reminds me of a lover... i once had in my life - but no more. the poem touched me and i love the way it wraps-up and comes to a closing. very good indeed....

my fav line: I asked ancient spirits to take my pain away

bloodstone
| Posted on 2010-06-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
  I think the way you rhyme sounds a little contrived, but some of the lines themselves are good. Thanks for the read.
| Posted on 2010-06-24 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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