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    dots Submission Name: The Silence And The SIlent:Open to Revisioningdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/211
    Words: 421
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Silence And The SIlent:Open to Revisioningdots
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    To all of you.

    (All of the silence sounds the same.)

    Do you ever wonder where the end of the blowing wind goes,
    like all in time it must die.
    Fading out in a cold draft,
    nothing will remain but the chill.
    Memories sometimes fade.
    We think they're lies,
    so far gone from our last moment in light.
    Death is what we call disbelief,
    awe and misery all wrapped up like a gift to receive.
    There is a two-fold crime in our life,
    like the silence it echos in our head.
    Truth and lies.

    (All of the silence sounds the same.)

    Walk where the shade has fallen,
    it holds much more weight when all falls from grace.
    Hold up the pillars,
    That epic struggle with in.
    No shelter in life.
    Dueling nature converse in love and crime.

    (All of the silence sounds the same.)

    From words of the silent, the damned.
    No glorious miracle will be given from the voice of God at our end.
    This is when all you tried for just dies,
    no more wrong or right.
    So much wickedness.
    The silent can't console you in grief,
    no words can bring what was lost back.

    Nightfall could not come soon enough,
    let all our love in light take a moment in peace as the darkness comes to be.
    From all we know this time we just die,
    a moment of grace was when our eyes laid back, let memories dance in mind.

    (All of the silence sounds the same.)

    The love was lost,
    torn,
    beaten back from all dreams,
    all the world we can't see is gone.
    Our heart - Ice
    Sorrow has painted everything black,
    sipping on agony one shot at a time.
    Let all we hold dear die with nothing.
    Our soul - Darkness
    Leave no grand legacy behind,
    all we know was corrupted from our creators hand.
    Our mind - Corrupt

    (All of the silence sounds the same.)

    All the silent speak to us wicked.
    All of them speak in laughter.
    Silent polite stinging lies.

    (All of the silence sounds the same.)

    Trapped in this firestorm of sin,
    another one has fallen craving attention and sorrow,
    all was left behind when you fell silent in your lies.
    Just look to the future of life,
    bleak and spiraling down this never ending abyss of silence.
    Trapped.
    Trapped under the whispers within.
    All this silence sounds the same.

    The silent hold no sin.




    Submitted on 2010-06-24 19:55:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I would make small changes, but your probably better off sussing them out yourself. I think I've read some of your earlier work and it showed little promise. But this is an improvement, you could build from here.
    | Posted on 2010-06-24 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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