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    dots Submission Name: Yahweh dots
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    Author: Theophilus
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 116/174/95
    Words: 422
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 469
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       david crowders music video Oh how he loves us, the guy on the left is just flippin out and its awesome.


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    dotsYahweh dots
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    I'm going to have to type this 
    because my fingers cant write fast enough
    (when my heart is screaming)
    its hard for the rest of me to keep up sometimes
    and I really think its on the verge of screaming right now.

    And its for no particular reason at all,
    its just because I saw a kid just now,
    maybe in his twenties I don’t know
    but he was playing guitar and he was singing that song,
    “oh how he loves us”
    but he was singing like it was what he was made to do.

    Like his real talent and passion
    wasn’t strumming that guitar or singing the words…
    it was closing his eyes and dancing and
    stomping around like a little kid and
    throwing his head back and shouting the words
    not to an audience or a microphone
    but to God himself,

    like he was really singing to the creator of the universe
    the one who made him.
    His breath and his heart beat racing and
    his hair flying around in chaos around him,
    like that’s what God sees when he thinks of that kid.

    And it was beautiful.

    Swaying around and laughing and jumping up and down
    and running around the stage like his heart
    is just overwhelmed with Glory.

    Do you know what glory is?

    Glory is when God is inside of you
    and you can feel Him dancing too
    and all you can do is dance with Him
    and make a fool of yourself to everyone around
    who has no idea what it feels like to have
    the love of your life smiling at you.

    And its like your fingers cant type fast enough
    And your voice cant cry out loud enough
    And your body cant spin and jump and flail
    With the same intensity
    Of this feeling inside of you
    It cant be expressed

    But you still have to try,

    And the closest we can come
    To putting this feeling in words
    Is just a gasping weeping sound
    And it sounds like air rushing out of your lips
    And a faint cry at the same time
    That must be how we got the word “oh”

    The noise you make when words fail

    That is God’s name.




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      loved it and it was a much needed end to my night. God Bless.
    | Posted on 2010-06-29 00:00:00 | by Cathartus | [ Reply to This ]
      you are absolutely a joy you know.

    and you know what?

    God smiles. God surely must smile when you come to mind.

    i love that you write about the joys of the heart. how too, that knowing and loving God should bring no shame at all. none.

    you have this way of reminding me that my love is not for naught.

    stay beautiful.

    and please, please keep reminding me...

    you are some kind of light. yes. you are.

    thank you!!!



    | Posted on 2010-06-28 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      This has such a great voice to it -- like someone who wants to share a story, but not just a story, a happening, something they saw/witnessed that made them feel and to pass that on somehow, second hand, third hand, fourth hand. Just so that they can catch a glimpse.

    And, as the reader, I did. I definitely did.

    I also like the small tangents you take with this as well -- how you step aside with the part about defining glory and then again with the bit about how we found the word "oh". It made for honest good reading through and through.

    -Emeya
    | Posted on 2010-06-27 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]


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