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    dots Submission Name: Nothing/ Our lovedots
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    Author: isis_lenore
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    dotsNothing/ Our lovedots
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    Neglecting to remember the good times          
    we’ve had

    Only noticing the neon red sign buzzing in the
    background

    Thinking that next time will be better, will be
    worse, will be the same

    Honing in on the inconsistencies between
    what’s said and unsaid

    Interesting to note, we’re not missing much,
    only the important things

    Not finding anything solid, something that’s
    unquestionably worth saving

    Granted, you say there is love. Love, love,
    what is the meaning of this love?





    Submitted on 2010-06-27 15:30:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Intriguing. It's a different perspective on love, and makes one think, what is the meaning of love when the important things are unnoticed. I loved the way you had it set up as well. It made certain lines jump out more.
    | Posted on 2010-06-28 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so perceptive! Sometimes in our desire to have love, we have love that is not!

    These lines:

    "Interesting to note, we’re not missing much,
    only the important things

    Not finding anything solid, something that’s
    unquestionably worth saving"

    anchor the poem, and take us all where we have been at times past.
    | Posted on 2010-06-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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