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    dots Submission Name: Yall Can Come Out Now.dots
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    Author: MyX
    ASL Info:    27/m/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 932/973/107
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1539



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    dotsYall Can Come Out Now.dots
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    My Pen thought it would rape me today.
    So did she.
    So did he.

    my asshole is my deepest, darkest, dirtiest secret
    everything else about me is somehow illuminated, shallow and obvious
    i'm not a difficult man
    i shower regularly
    all that i'm asking for here are the rights to my own asshole
    who could deprive me of that?
    don't even look at it.
    it isn't there for your curiosity
    it isn't yours
    it's mine
    the end of the track
    not the beginning
    and if you want to get close to it leap down to one of the brown locomotives
    hanging by my ass hair begging me not to drop it into hell
    that is what the toilet is
    isn't it?
    everything that is gone is flushed down a toilet somewhere
    every smidgen of talent you waste
    every dollar you spend
    flushed down the toilet somewhere!
    isn't that what they say?
    you could lick my toilet seat if you want a piece so bad
    it could be moist and arousing
    couldn't we say that too?
    i don't see a backstage pass
    to my ass

    From the dick trickory of millions of women trembling their hindquarters on youtube feeds,
    to the ass slappery of 90s vh1 whores on music videos
    i would rather piss croutons than look at you let alone grant you access to my apple fuckin pie!

    This is between me and the Pen!






    Submitted on 2010-06-29 00:31:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was funny. And so depressing. You remind me of Eminem in 8 Mile. He just tries so hard to be great, to woo an already-biased crowd. And he does it. He becomes one of 'dem. I'm not calling you a rapper.
    So I'm glad you hit enter. It makes sense you would, you were talking about your pride and joy.
    This is what I mean. I don't know if you were writing this sober or whatever state you could possibly be in at that moment, but this is the kind of writing that needs to come out before the better stuff comes online. This is kind of infantile but it's so full of that rage and the metaphor you chose really picks up on it and frames it. Like a family portrait.
    Just don't post every [censored] before flushing. Keep it in the reserve and see how you can change it around, if you're so inclined.
    | Posted on 2010-07-04 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      thoughts:

    i agree.

    leave my [censored] alone. it is there for one reason. and one reason only. ain't no others, brother. (or sister). (not that i go that way).

    but then you don't mean literally.
    do you?

    | Posted on 2010-06-30 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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