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    dots Submission Name: The Sacred Particles Of Taodots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/211
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Sacred Particles Of Taodots
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    Entropy- Cold and calculated
    Earth below - Heaven side
    Clouds shiver, hungry for the dawn.

    Canopy of stars - Flashing brilliant, scars
    Dissolution - Mayhem
    Beneath it all; Just a wandering pawn

    The sea will dry - Evolution of time
    The mountains will erode - With a particle storm
    Colliding bliss - The essence of life; Never lost - Merely displaced

    Weakly; Is how we think of the Tao
    Everything is in the end -- Nothing




    Submitted on 2010-06-30 16:19:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed reading this. I feel like you used all the right words to describe something very sacred. Personally, I would have been interested to see more of a story behind what you're saying; my favorite stanza is definitely the third, because it gives a little bit of a tale of events. But otherwise, it was a very pleasant poem to read.
    | Posted on 2010-07-01 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]


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