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    dots Submission Name: Changedots
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    Author: lechuga
    ASL Info:    16\M\NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 7/15/27
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 407
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    You know, it's true what they say-
    Things never do stay the same
    No, it'll never be the same for me
    It could never be the way that it used to be
    And there will never again be a time
    When I sourly wade through the river,
    Soaked to the skin, filled to the brim
    With opinions about life and living
    I told you the world as I saw it in mind
    And you, were ever so kind
    Befriending such a strange sight
    In the Wenatchee river at midnight

    I knew little joy
    The world is harsh,
    Around me, it pressed in
    I didn't yet know:
    the broadness of his smile;
    the angle of his cheeks;
    the lilt of his voice
    that made me go weak at the knees.
    You did care, didn't you, dear?
    You heard me call.
    Nothing quite hurts like nothing at all.
    But you felt responsibility that isn't yours to bear
    Let me take back that cross; it is mine to wear.




    Submitted on 2010-06-30 17:41:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lettuce pray...
    (and the bridesmaids in green dresses all bowed their heads)

    I'm sorry, your name reminds me of a bad wedding I attended once. With that aside, back to your poem:

    I love this because I love river-wading, especially in the dead (pardon the pun) of night... and it captivated me with the imagery, and its desolate air and its all-meets-nothing solitude, interrupted by one of those well-meaning gestures that always pulls us straight to the muddy bottom when we step back out on the shoreline. I feel you in this, I do... I do...

    (and the bridesmaids in green dresses all looked up and smiled at the final Amen).
    | Posted on 2010-07-01 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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