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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Nothing can return that feeling to me...
    Like the river colliding into sea - a volley of waves, your passion crashing down - on me.
    In your eyes I was something like a God - you believed.
    See it worthy once again, emerald green like the Atlantic, perhaps - your gaze rustic in contempt, that love you gave burned like Hell - through these walls.
    My hair; you took hold of me; spoiled with energy, spoiled with that voice - lust you speak - it pulls me into me.

    Was I lost - to blind to see.
    Who I was - had I become epitome?

    So clear - your body wept with each crawl.
    Yet the mirror shows the lie in it all-
    I am the reason for your fall-

    Sinewy and sharp - your elbows dig into me...
    A contrast to monstrous might - a harlot you came and cut





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