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    dots Submission Name: Had I Become Epitomedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 75/182/208
    Words: 297
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsHad I Become Epitomedots
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    Nothing can return that feeling to me...
    Like the river colliding into sea - a volley of waves, your passion crashing down - on me.
    In your eyes I was something like a God - you believed.
    See it worthy once again, emerald green like the Atlantic, perhaps - your gaze rustic in contempt, that love you gave burned like Hell - through these walls.
    My hair; you took hold of me; spoiled with energy, spoiled with that voice - lust you speak - it pulls me into me.

    Was I lost - to blind to see.
    Who I was - had I become epitome?

    So clear - your body wept with each crawl.
    Yet the mirror shows the lie in it all-
    I am the reason for your fall-

    Sinewy and sharp - your elbows dig into me...
    A contrast to monstrous might - A man who will break the pass, pillars of - Hercules.
    In your mouth a legend grows - each and every breath.
    Listen to what you speak, whimpering cos like that of truly finding that feeling of love.
    My chest; slashing so deep, sweat pours out of me; spoiled with adrenaline, spoiled with that clenching - tight on the sheets - it pulls me into me.

    Was I there - I'm so sorry.
    Who I was - blind to see my folly.

    So dark - your body craved it more.
    In the mirror my face screams the saddest melody-
    A spider- I'm spinning a web, I let you fly in-

    My greatest sin - I did this with no regrets at all.
    I felt you with in, each moment of-
    We mixed it in- crimson and milky white.
    You were no match for my might.




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