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    dots Submission Name: Second Comingdots
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    Author: Codge
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 3/1/1
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Second Coming.

    Cock of the run or so I thought
    in Grandma’s chicken coop
    wallowing in her out-sized wellies
    with my saucepan full of scraps.

    Hens gathered, a knee-deep ocean
    as in I waded, cock a hoop
    scattering bread on turbulent waters
    until the real cock surfaced.

    Moses-like, he parted those feathery waves,
    pecked at the soft hollows of my knees
    until my cries and the hens’ clamour
    interrupted Grandma’s Sunday bake.

    Hands white with flour, a powder-keg
    in a pinafore, she took the saucepan,
    gave that cock a scrap he couldn’t stomach.
    Flattened him with a shocking oath.

    Bandaged in bacon strips, spread-eagled
    across a plate the size of a dustbin lid,
    his Second Coming was enough
    to strike terror in the chicken hearted.





    Submitted on 2010-07-02 12:30:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I really liked this poem. I like how you resay things cleverly, like 'a scrap he couldn't stomach,' and 'second coming' instead of saying what you mean openly. Also, your poem has a definate meter, which makes it easier to read because it doesn't rhyme. There were some phrases that didn't really make sense to me though, like 'cock a hoop,' and 'outsized wellies.' That might just be vocabulary I'm not familiar with, though. I also don't really understand why you labled this poem as 'comedy'...I obviously don't get the joke. I think that the cock dying is sort of sad, not funny.
    Thanks for sharing this write.
    -dancer
    | Posted on 2010-07-05 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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