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Lost Soul

Author: col13x
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Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Lost Soul

They ask me “ who are you ” ¿

The stars a myriad map dusted, whispering, home


As their light filters through the tears
The hot, acid sting
Drags this choke from my throat
And breaks through every chord


As I perched on the brink
As some release, relief, could take me there

Away from this un-edified Earth
Its constructs of brick
Its struggle to, never connect
But simply, forget

The darkness sings
And I sift, through astounding beauties


And nothing here is kissed
Save in reflections and ruminations
Of how does this relate to “ me ”
How I, am but the broken part
Of my own identity

Uncaring in its stomp and glitter
Its vomit promiscuous and blandishment
Of numb
These human fools of folly enthralled
Break each other by their own unity of ridicule

I want to go home

I want to know again the traces
Of those other arts in thought
To feel my whole
To feel my part


Where the stars myriad have mapped their welcome
And breathe remembered
Not forsaken

Where I am not left alone
To weep on their vision
Or cry for the sake of their evidence

When I am greeted once again by my family

And not to be

So distorted here

And lose my faith

As I sink beneath this plethora of polish
Chrome and scramble puddle
Of having it all

This sickness infests and infects

I want to go home

I do not want to feel this aching longing

They ask me “ who are you ” ?
But beyond comprehension
The stars a myriad mapped and dusted, whispering


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