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    dots Submission Name: Lost Souldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 321
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLost Souldots
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    They ask me who are you

    The stars a myriad map dusted, whispering, home

    Home

    As their light filters through the tears
    The hot, acid sting
    Drags this choke from my throat
    And breaks through every chord

    Home

    As I perched on the brink
    As some release, relief, could take me there

    Away from this un-edified Earth
    Its constructs of brick
    Its struggle to, never connect
    But simply, forget

    The darkness sings
    And I sift, through astounding beauties

    Home

    And nothing here is kissed
    Save in reflections and ruminations
    Of how does this relate to me
    How I, am but the broken part
    Of my own identity

    Ugly
    Uncaring in its stomp and glitter
    Its vomit promiscuous and blandishment
    Of numb
    Blinded
    These human fools of folly enthralled
    Break each other by their own unity of ridicule

    Home
    I want to go home

    I want to know again the traces
    Of those other arts in thought
    To feel my whole
    To feel my part

    Home

    Where the stars myriad have mapped their welcome
    And breathe remembered
    Not forsaken

    Where I am not left alone
    To weep on their vision
    Or cry for the sake of their evidence

    When I am greeted once again by my family

    And not to be

    So distorted here

    And lose my faith

    As I sink beneath this plethora of polish
    Chrome and scramble puddle
    Of having it all
    Before
    Death

    This sickness infests and infects

    Home
    I want to go home

    I do not want to feel this aching longing
    Anymore

    They ask me who are you ?
    But beyond comprehension
    The stars a myriad mapped and dusted, whispering
    Waiting
    Calling
    Welcoming
    Me

    Home






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