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    dots Submission Name: why have you stopped fighting?dots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotswhy have you stopped fighting?dots

    Why are you turning your back?
    Why are you walking away?
    Do you really believe that
    you have made things better?

    Let me clarify the fact that
    you are lying to yourself.
    Don't say that you don't care,
    it only makes you look weak and cruel.

    I came to you knowing I'd be loved
    and welcomed. Had I lied to myself
    unknowingly? You have pushed me
    away with your unrealistic reasons.

    I have been torn to bits with
    scars to prove. My vision is blurred
    with the tears I'm crying because
    you decided to walk away from a problem.

    Have you truly surrendered already,
    while others continue to fight?Stop
    lying to yourself and everyone else.
    Start realizing that the fight is far from over

    Submitted on 2010-07-03 16:27:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it, gives me the strenght to carry on. Thanks for writing this. xx
    | Posted on 2010-07-11 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]
      It's kinda a rant but some parts did flow better together and I think it is something that many people can relate to.
    | Posted on 2010-07-07 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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