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    dots Submission Name: Never dream (July 3 2010)dots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
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    dotsNever dream (July 3 2010)dots
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    Never dream (July 3 2010)

    To be hunted like a rabbit is not a simple thing,
    To be stalked and always taunted,
    Claimed to be the tease.
    To be hunted like a rabbit then caged and
    Claimed diseased,
    To cower like a child
    Never truly finding peace.
    To be branded like a cow called a heifer and a whore,
    To always run in fear that you’ll never amount to more.
    This life you see so curious is not a simple thing,
    No glamour on the preys behalf, the hunter always keen,
    No where to sleep at night if by sleep you mean to dream,
    No safety where safety should lie for nothings as it seems.
    With worlds decay they multiple the hunters honored themes,
    To mortify by candle light to hunt this rabbits meat.
    This life it is not simple, this life is not our own,
    To be hunted like a rabbit always giving the perfect show,
    In fear we flee, screaming stop, the world will never know,
    To cower like a child,
    Never to fall asleep,
    In beds we lie awake at night always praying for relief,
    But the hunter never falters no he never seems to sleep,
    The hunt is his only pleasure always yearning for our defeat.
    To be hunted like a rabbit is not a simple thing,
    We sleep with our eyes open and never ever dream,
    For safety lies in fear these days
    As hunters live to feed, feeding off our innocence
    Turning games that make us thieves,
    Thieves of our own virtue turning virgin into whore,
    We lose our voices as we cry ever sleepless evermore
    To be hunted like a rabbit is not a simple thing
    We lose ourselves in fear never in safety never dream.




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      Too complex for my simple mind to analyse with any real depth but I especially liked the references to dreams and lack of security, surely we all feel like that at some time. Once again, nice to read something I can relate to as it doesnt happen often! Keep it up. :)
    | Posted on 2010-07-06 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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