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Submission Name:
Onryō - The Mirror Smiled Back
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Author:
HisNameIsNoMore
ASL Info:
28 - Male - Ohio
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3.09 - 75/182/213
Words:
46
Class/Type:
Misc/Misc
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Onryō - The Mirror Smiled Back
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Iridescence face - Brilliance displace
Iridescent smile - Wile amongst guile
It's had enough - Enough is enough -- enough...
It has buried itself deep inside.
Can't you see it? Right there at the edge of the light!
Onryō spread your vengeance
Submitted on 2010-07-05 03:05:11
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I enjoyed the rhyming here. It's a beautiful little piece, and the imagery you started pleased me very much. The perfect balance of not enough and too much.
C.J.
| Posted on 2010-07-05 00:00:00 | by
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