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    dots Submission Name: Onry&#333; - The Mirror Smiled Backdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 75/182/208
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOnry&#333; - The Mirror Smiled Backdots
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    Iridescence face - Brilliance displace
    Iridescent smile - Wile amongst guile

    It's had enough - Enough is enough -- enough...

    It has buried itself deep inside.
    Can't you see it? Right there at the edge of the light!
    Onry&#333; spread your vengeance




    Submitted on 2010-07-05 03:05:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed the rhyming here. It's a beautiful little piece, and the imagery you started pleased me very much. The perfect balance of not enough and too much.

    C.J.
    | Posted on 2010-07-05 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]


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